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mechagoji75

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Would like to find the Jim Uhls draft.
I had the fortunate of asking Mr. Jim Uhls, if there was any access to his "DEAD RECKONING" script, and this what he said:
"Actually, no. It was typed on a computer that no longer is made, and I don't have a print-out copy. There is no reason to see it. I changed it drastically when it get set-up, and it never got made."
 

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The Ninja, by Tommy Lee Wallace and John Carpenter
Interesting take on the material, reimagined with Saigo as a bit of a slasher villain, with some strong action sequences. This version of Nicholas is a bit weak, though, what with being kind of a sissy and whining about his cat not liking him. He's incredibly ineffectual and doesn't really do anything either. And the last minute hypnosis thing with Justine is even more of a wtf moment here than it was in Richter's draft.
Honestly, while i am Carpenter fan, only parts i really liked in this script are action sequences. It wasn't perfect, but i liked Richter's draft more. Maybe it is bit too long and i did have problems with some parts but i liked how it has more story, and Nicholas is much better character in that draft. Would be curious to read (probably long lost) Tom Cole and Irvin Kershner's drafts, just to see what was their take and how the script was changed between Richter and Carpenter/Wallace drafts.
 

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I had the fortunate of asking Mr. Jim Uhls, if there was any access to his "DEAD RECKONING" script, and this what he said:
"Actually, no. It was typed on a computer that no longer is made, and I don't have a print-out copy. There is no reason to see it. I changed it drastically when it get set-up, and it never got made."
Ah, that sucks big time to hear, but it's nothing new when it comes to script collecting. I guess now we can only hope that his later draft (one with humanoid who sucks adrenaline out of people's brains), Emmerich/Devlin 1990 draft or Tab Murphy's Isobar Run still exist and will show up somewhere.
 

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Been a while since I posted here. Seeing as I actually got to read a script recently, it'd be a shame not to say anything about it, though.
Dungeons & Dragons: The Hand of chaos by David Leslie Johnson (1st draft, 9.05.12)
To start on a positive not, the script isn't terrible: there's some spirit of adventure to it, the pacing is brisk, the locations and setpieces are varied (if derivative), and the banter between the character sometimes managed to amuse me. The action scenes are moderately engaging and not too over the top, and there's a decent splattering of magic to mix things up. That said, when looking at the script as a whole, it becomes obvious how little of it is in any way original even judging it merely by fantasy movie standards. Forgotten Realms as a setting may not be the most unique, but it definitely facilitates more interesting stories than what is really just another McGuffin chase with a revenge subplot shoehorned in (probably because the writer realised that there wasn't much in the way of personal stakes in the main plot; the problem is that he decided to leave its resolution for a potential sequel). There wasn't even any advantage taken of the diversity of races present in the source material. To the contrary, the only non-human protagonist and potentially promising character - a lizardman - is quickly revealed to be another human afflicted by a spell, which gives the writer an excuse to write him the same way as he would a human. Other non-humans are relegated to villain roles , and let's just say that none of them stand out. (a cunning, smarmy, weasel-y gnome and an arrogant elf drow; sure haven't seen those before!). There's a twist related to one of those, but I wouldn't really say it particularly enriches either the character in question or the story in general. The protagonist is your typical wisecracking adventurer/rogue with a heart of gold/reluctant hero. The writer goes to certain lengths to emphasize his greediness, but you'd win no points by predicting his character arc. There was one exchange he had that gave me some hope that your typical fantasy tropes would be subverted somehow, when
he dismisses the lore behind the artifact they're after as a scare tactic to dissuade people from trying to find it. Sadly, very soon afterwards all this lore is revealed to be true. And it's generic lore at that, you know "ancient artifact that can awaken an ancient evil and allow it to conquer the world" kinda stuff.
Of course there's also your requisite strong woman love interest, plus an awkward mage kinda similar to the one in Warcraft, but they barely warrant a mention.
On the whole, I guess it's competent but not much beyond that. It doesn't aim high to be sure and doesn't stand out among other fantasy flicks (I guess it would've been the first movie to feature
an undead dragon
if it had got made relatively soon after the script had been written, but that's hardly a great distinction. The franchise has a potential for more, no doubt.

I guess I also read Marks' Suicide Squad script, but it was so generic and unremarkable I'd be at loss to say anything of substance about it. I suppose I should point to the stupidity of the idea that a mob boss would invite a notorious hitman that he knows is contracted to kill him to his limo for some face-to-face haggling.
 

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Tomb Raider, by Brent V. Friedman
I reviewed this one not long ago, and I gave it another read. I still think it would have been a more than decent film. It just needs some of the less interesting or lamer elements to be rewritten or reworked. The overall plot is pretty good.
 

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Tomb Raider, by Steven E. de Souza
That wasn't nearly as good as it could have been. While it has a very effective opening establishing the villains, and the premise of Alexander hiding vast knowledge away from the world in his tomb is pretty good, the execution of just about everything else falls flat. The trail of clues Lara follows seem poorly strung together, what with her diving under the Aegean to find out something she basically already knew. And once she gets to Kafiristan, it's a long stretch of relatively unexciting walking, rafting, hiking, climbing, etc. The supporting cast is rather boring, the villains stop being interesting or intimidating after the first few scenes, and Aunt Gwen's obsession with the Abominable Snowman keeps coming up and it isn't at all funny. And to top it off, nothing at all interesting is done with Alexander's tomb. The traps are childishly easy, and there seems to be no weight at all given to why Alexander hid all this stuff away. I can't believe I'm saying this, but the co-writer of Mortal Kombat: Annihilation wrote a better Tomb Raider script than the co-writer of Die Hard. I'm starting to think that De Souza is only as good as the draft he's rewriting. Although come to think of it, Street Fighter should have been a pretty big clue. XD
 

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Escape from L.A., by Coleman Luck
I honestly kind of enjoyed reading this. It's probably a bit too weird for its own good, but I had fun with it for the most part. The ending is far too abrupt, though, and randomly framing it as a prequel on literally the last page was stupid and made no sense.
 

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Escape from L.A., by Coleman Luck
I honestly kind of enjoyed reading this. It's probably a bit too weird for its own good, but I had fun with it for the most part. The ending is far too abrupt, though, and randomly framing it as a prequel on literally the last page was stupid and made no sense.
It was a interesting read, as I remember.
 

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Escape from L.A., by Coleman Luck
I honestly kind of enjoyed reading this. It's probably a bit too weird for its own good, but I had fun with it for the most part. The ending is far too abrupt, though, and randomly framing it as a prequel on literally the last page was stupid and made no sense.
As I recall the ending is supposed to be a joking reference to why everyone says "I thought you were dead" in Escape from New York.
 

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It doesn't quite match up with Snake at the beginning of that, though.
Unless it was meant to be another clone.
 

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Nope. He doesn't even rate a mention. Weirdly, Snake's real first name is apparently Bob here. And not Robert, just Bob. He's even called Lt. Bob Plissken at one point. XD
 

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Nope. He doesn't even rate a mention. Weirdly, Snake's real first name is apparently Bob here. And not Robert, just Bob. He's even called Lt. Bob Plissken at one point. XD
Carpenter talked about Fresno Bob's fate on the first episode of Robert Rodriguez's The Director's Chair. He said that Fresno Bob was ganged raped and set on fire.
 

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Alien III, by Eric Red
So this one starts out fairly unimpressive and predictable, only to just get weirder and weirder as it goes along, with a final 20-25 pages consisting of nothing but wtf moments. It's interesting to note that the entire surviving cast of Aliens is killed off here, which happens offscreen and is never explained or elaborated on at all. So the shitty opening of Alien³ is even shittier here, not helped by the hopelessly bland cast of characters. And the ideas for the xenomorph here are just silly, up to and including the mooing cow monsters that are apparently meant to be "eerie." And I have no clue what the make of that last act. Things just start going even crazier for no reason, and I can't even try to explain it.
 

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I thought Alien 3 by Eric Red was a ridiculous but had some interesting ideas with the Aliens attacking terra-formed areas looking like earth including running amuck in 7-11's lol
 

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I think it's obvious, even without knowing the shit Red went through while writing the script, that he just stopped caring about it further into the writing. It is a very bad and ridiculous script, but i didn't mind some action and gore moments, and only for that i could call it a guilty pleasure read.